Couple of still life tryouts

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Couple of still life tryouts

Postby rokkstar on Fri Mar 11, 2005 12:13 pm

Hi Guys,

Tried doing some "arty" still life.
Comments appreciated.

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Postby Nnnnsic on Fri Mar 11, 2005 12:14 pm

From an artistic stand point, your first one is great, if not kitsch, and your second one lacks depth and substance.

That's from an artistic stand point, though.
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Postby Glen on Fri Mar 11, 2005 12:15 pm

Matt, like your pencils, very nice 8)
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Postby Greg B on Fri Mar 11, 2005 12:20 pm

Matt, I think they both have something. The first one is probably better than the second, but I don't really agree with Leigh's assessment - I think it has artistic merit, although the pencils would have looked better if they were all sharpened to the same degree. And I would have put them in colour order.

The forks look great.

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Postby rokkstar on Fri Mar 11, 2005 12:37 pm

Greg B wrote:I think it has artistic merit, although the pencils would have looked better if they were all sharpened to the same degree. And I would have put them in colour order.


I would have done that greg, but I was lucky to get that shot. Moments later I disturbed where they lay for the umpteenth time and decided to abandon the idea by tilting the board and letting them run off. I underestimated the patience needed to arrange pencils like that - makes you appreciate record breaking dominoes people.

Thanks for the comments guys, I prefer the forks too. I like the shadows caused.

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Postby robw25 on Fri Mar 11, 2005 12:54 pm

mat
good job... i like them both well done

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Postby mic on Fri Mar 11, 2005 1:16 pm

Very nice rokkstar,

Very creative thought process :D

Yeah the Forks are great :wink:
The pencils I like too

Keep up the thinking process.

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Postby Onyx on Fri Mar 11, 2005 2:58 pm

Good depth of field in the first I reckon. Although I do find it a little too bright and hurty on the eyes. ;)
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Postby Kellogs on Fri Mar 11, 2005 3:13 pm

AWESOME first shot. The shadows really work for me.

It looks like it should be hanging up in a cafe or something. WELL DONE!!! :D

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Postby sirhc55 on Fri Mar 11, 2005 3:20 pm

Matt - the first shot of the forks shows artistry and I like the composition. For me the second shot of the pencils is very mundane and contrived IMO. But the one thing to always remember, everyone sees differently :D
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Postby rokkstar on Fri Mar 11, 2005 3:55 pm

Thanks for the comments everyone.

I think the problem with the pencils is that I didnt invest as much time in the lighting. I thought that the pattern would be enough to give it interest. I might reshoot it with some different light angles and make everyones eyes hurt evenmore :lol:
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Postby Nicole on Fri Mar 11, 2005 5:58 pm

I like the idea behind the first one but also think it's a touch bright. I like the pencils too.
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Postby flipfrog on Fri Mar 11, 2005 6:17 pm

love them both!

keep 'em coming...
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Postby beej on Fri Mar 11, 2005 6:33 pm

rokkstar,

Quite like those shots.

Could you briefly explain your lighting setup?

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Postby rokkstar on Fri Mar 11, 2005 6:43 pm

Well the lighting set up is extremely simplistic.
Its a normal desklamp angled low down with a daylight balanced lightbulb in it. That's all that i have used.
No diffuser, no softboxes nothing.

That is it.
I wanted to say something amazing and wowing but unfortunately there is no magic.
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Postby Killakoala on Fri Mar 11, 2005 7:07 pm

Print out the forks and mount it in your dining room :) Should look great there. I reckon it works great.
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Postby robw25 on Fri Mar 11, 2005 10:53 pm

Kellogs wrote:AWESOME first shot. The shadows really work for me.

It looks like it should be hanging up in a cafe or something. WELL DONE!!! :D

Kellogs


yes kellogs thats where it would look "right"...

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